The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.
The bar chart illustrates how long both genders did leisure activities during 1998 and 1999.
Overall
, it can be seen that there were only women who did part-time jobs and housework,
while
the remaining categories show the same trend.
To begin
with, people who don't have work, whether unemployed or retired experienced the same value in both males and females with 80
hours
and just over 70
hours
.
While
full-time
worker
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workers
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saw a lower scale at 50
hours
for
male
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males
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and 40
hours
for
female
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females
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.
However
, there were females only who were employed
part time
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and housewives, with house working had a longer period at almost 60
hours
. Meanwhile, females who did part-time jobs were a little bit lower
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previous one, with 40
hours
.
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