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The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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illustrates
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 the rotation of
silkworm
 and the levels of the production of
silk
 clothes.
Overall
 it can be
notest
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noted
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 that the life cycle goes through
fourth
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the fourth
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stages
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stage
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 where the
silk
 fibre
of
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the produced for the next plan in six levels. First and foremost, eggs
where is in the first levels of the
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, where is in the first levels of the silkworm's life,
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silkworm
's life
takes
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take
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 ten days to become
silkworm
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a silkworm
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 larve which feeds on mulberry
loat
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lot
,
then
 through about 4-6 weeks larve becomes small and
it
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divides
to
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into
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 two
silk
thred
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thread
third
,
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after that from 3-8 days it changed to cocoon which is the stage before
last
then
 after 16 days it
become
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 a
dult
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adult
silkworm
 called moth.
On the other hand
, the second
plans
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plan
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 which concerns
to
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apply
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the production of
the
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silk
 clothes , the
silk
 cloths are first selected and boiled.
Thereafter
, they are unwound and twisted. In fact, for a single cloth, the unwound thread is measured at astonishing figures, 300 to 800 meters long. Ultimately, the thread is dyed and weaved to make finished goods.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words silkworm, silk with synonyms.
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