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The Chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The Chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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are
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 a bar chart providing the proportion of exports in 5 categories(Petroleum products, Engineered goods,
Gems
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 and jewellery, agricultural products and textiles) in 2015 and 2016.,
as well as
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, Percentage change in values in those years. It is evident from the information that, Petroleum and engineered products had by far the highest number of exports in both years with between approximately 55 to 65
billions
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billion
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of
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dollars. Second in terms of
exportation
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 was
gems
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 and
jewellry
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jewellery
 with around 40 billion dollars. Agricultural goods
was
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third,
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at 30
billions
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billion
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. Meanwhile, exporting text tiles
were
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 a little less common. The
exportation
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 rate for
that is
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 just approximately 25 and 30 billions of dollars. A glance at the table provided
,
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 reveals
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growth of
exportation
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 in all categories except for
gems
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 and
jwellery
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jewellery
 with a 5.18
percent
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per cent
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 decrease.
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, textiles
enjoys
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 the highest development with
mere
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a mere
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 15
percent
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per cent
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. In summary, in 2016 there was a noticeable promotion for
exportation
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 but
gems
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 and
jewellrys
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jewellery
meet
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 a downfall.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gems, exportation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • value
  • percentage change
  • compare
  • trends
  • changes
  • chart
  • table
  • overview
  • introduce
  • highlight
  • describe
  • summarize
  • information
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