The Chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

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a bar chart providing the proportion of exports in 5 categories(Petroleum products, Engineered goods,

Gems

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and jewellery, agricultural products and textiles) in 2015 and 2016.,

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, Percentage change in values in those years. It is evident from the information that, Petroleum and engineered products had by far the highest number of exports in both years with between approximately 55 to 65

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dollars. Second in terms of

exportation

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gems

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and

jewellry

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jewellery

with around 40 billion dollars. Agricultural goods

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third,

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at 30

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. Meanwhile, exporting text tiles

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a little less common. The

exportation

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rate for

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just approximately 25 and 30 billions of dollars. A glance at the table provided

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reveals

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growth of

exportation

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in all categories except for

gems

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and

jwellery

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jewellery

with a 5.18

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decrease.

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, textiles

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the highest development with

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percent

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per cent

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. In summary, in 2016 there was a noticeable promotion for

exportation

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but

gems

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and

jewellrys

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jewellery

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a downfall.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

163 words

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The Chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to bring up children? What consequences could this way of parenting pose on children as they get older?

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