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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 200 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 200 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart reveals data
according to
 a 2008 report about the use of
energy
 in the United States from 1980 to the predicted 2030.There are six kinds of
energy
 including
petrol
 and
oil
, coal, natural gas, nuclear, solar / wind and hydropower.
Overall
, the vast majority of
energy
 consumption in the USA was
petrol
 and
oil
, whilst the use of hydropower was mostly the least in the given time.
According to
 the information shown in the graph, Americans relied on
petrol
 and
oil
 the most in the given time which was above 30
quadrillion
units
 and was even expected to reach 50
quadrillion
units
 in 2030.
By contrast
, the consumption of hydropower was never over 5
quadrillion
units
 and was estimated to experience a plateau period of 2
quadrillion
units
 after 2010.
To sum up
, it can be apparently seen that
petrol
 and
oil
 played leading roles in
energy
Correct article usage
the energy
show examples
 supply in the USA over the
5
Correct word choice
last 5
show examples
decades.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, petrol, oil, quadrillion, units with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • depicts
  • trend
  • consumption
  • projections
  • slow growth
  • advancements
  • efficiency
  • acceleration
  • underscoring
  • expanding economy
  • household demands
  • trajectory
  • technological advancements
  • population growth
  • standards of living
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • sustainable energy policies
  • environmental impacts
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