Young people are now spending more and more time and money following fashion trends. What is your opinion? Is this a positive or negative development?

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Squandering their time and money on keeping updated with fashion trends may give rise to a multitude of negative impacts on young people.
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, making impulsive purchases of designer clothes can cause young individuals to suffer
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bankruptcy.
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is because these items are very expensive and can easily fall out of fashion before long, which makes buyers dissipate their own money before they can realize it to keep pace with the most current trends.
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, being a fashion slaver can impose a financial burden not only on the young but
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on their family as most of them are still financially dependent on their parents. Equally important, consumerism can pose great threats to the environment.
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, the more clothes young people buy, the more disposable clothes can be discarded. These wastes are hard to decompose and can soon overload the landfills, which creates negative impacts on the soil.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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