Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society. Because of this, all mothers and fathers should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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It is true that being a parent is a huge responsibility and raising children is going to be sophisticated if
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not impossible.
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I disagree with the idea that we should
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force all mothers and fathers to attend
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. In my opinion, the idea that all future
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should attend to all of the parenthood preparation is completely impractical. Many
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have a busy schedule, and many
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courses
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. I believe that it would be wrong to
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who are busy because of their hardscrabble life.
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could be forced to attend the classes, I doubt that people would
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on what good
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, so it would be difficult to
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everyone.
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being impractical, I would argue that training
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for
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are unnecessary
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have been raising children without
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hierarchy for decades.
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skills from their family and surrounding culture.
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, adults learn to be good
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by instinct, and by getting to know their child.
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intricate moments and
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out how to react to their child and correct the
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behavior.
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of
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requires either formal or complicated
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. In conclusion,
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seem to be a good idea, I
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that
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would be unworkable and quite pointless.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Parenting skills
  • Child development
  • Mandatory courses
  • Nutrition
  • Discipline strategies
  • Effective communication
  • Government regulations
  • Voluntary workshops
  • Community support
  • Cultural backgrounds
  • Personal beliefs
  • Emotionally stable
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