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Write a review about the first episode of a new TV show, 'Our World', in which the concept is a talkshow where experts give their views on climate change and how to prepare for it.

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‘Our
world
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World
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’ is an exciting new show coming from Channel 5 every
Wednesdays
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Wednesday
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 at 6pm. It is about an in-depth exploration
about
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of
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 the environment around us and how it is changing from time to time. First of all, I am delighted to see how the production crews delivered the show. The experts explain the
topic
 in
such
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an understandable way and
great
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in great
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 manners.
Not to mention
 that credible
datas
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data
 and proofs were served in relevance to the
topic
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in
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 the first episode. They certainly gave much wider knowledge about climate change to the viewers,
also
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and also
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 ignited awareness to prepare for climate change. Regarding the
topic
 of what caused
the
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climate change, I think the consumptive
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behaviours
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 of
human
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humans
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 should be discussed
further
within
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 the
panelists
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panellists
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. In my personal opinion, it is an interesting
topic
 and most of the panelists from
this
 episode have enough credibility to speak about
this
topic
.
Overall
, the show successfully put up a
topic
 that trends around the world. As more episodes go by, I am certain more people will tune in for the concept and the discussions drawn between the
panelists
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. I look forward to the next episode.
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