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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999.

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999.
The line chart illustrates the
unemployment
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 percentages in the United
States
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 and
Japan
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 over a six-year period from
March
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 1993 to
March
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 1999.
Overall
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, the
unemployment
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rate
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 decreased in the United
States
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while
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 it increased in
Japan
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. Beginning with the United
States
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, the
unemployment
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rate
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 started at 7% in
March
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 1993 and
then
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 gradually declined to approximately 4.1% by
March
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 1999.
This
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 marked a significant reduction of about 2.9% over the six-year span.
In contrast
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,
Japan
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 experienced a gradual increase in its
unemployment
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rate
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 during the same period. In
March
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 1993, the
unemployment
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rate
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 was 2.4%, which
then
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 climbed steadily to nearly 4.7% by
March
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 1999. In summary, the
unemployment
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rate
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 in the United
States
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 showed a consistent decline,
while
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 in
Japan
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, there was a noticeable upward trend. The
overall
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 picture suggests that the
labor
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 markets in these two countries followed distinct trajectories during the specified time frame.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, states, japan, march, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unemployment rate
  • Trend
  • Comparison
  • Period
  • Sharp increase/decrease
  • Correlation
  • Economic policies
  • Technological advancements
  • Global economic conditions
  • Consumer spending
  • Social welfare
  • Public sentiment
  • Predictions
  • Economic strategies
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