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THE GRAPH BELOW SHOWS FEMALE UNEMPLOYMENT RATES IN EACH COUNTRY OF THE UNITED KINGDOM IN 2013 AND 2014.

THE GRAPH BELOW SHOWS FEMALE UNEMPLOYMENT RATES IN EACH COUNTRY OF THE UNITED KINGDOM IN 2013 AND 2014.
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THE GRAPH BELOW SHOWS FEMALE UNEMPLOYMENT RATES IN EACH COUNTRY OF THE UNITED KINGDOM IN 2013 AND 2014. GRAPH HAS 8 LINES,4 COUNTRIES,AND 2 YEARS ENGLAND IS THE MOST POPULAR COUNTRY IN
UK
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THE UK
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,BUT HAD
HIGHEST
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THE HIGHEST
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 FEMALE UNEMPLOYMENT
PERSANTAGE
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PERCENTAGE
 IN 2013 WITH 6,8%. FORTUNATELY, IN 2014 IT DECREASED FOR 0,3 %. WALES HAD 5,4% IN 2013 AND 5,0% IN 2014. SCOTLAND HAD 6.1% IN 2013 BUT IT INCREASED
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 6 % IN 2014.
NOTHERN
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NORTHERN
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iRELAND
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IRELAND
Ireland
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 HAD 5,6% IN 2013 AND 4,6% IN 2013,IT IS THE LOWEST PROPORTION IN THE GRAPH. CLARIFY,IN ENGLAND,WALES AND
NOTHERN
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NORTHERN
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 IRELAND FEMALE UNEMPLOYMENT DECREASED IN 1 YEAR BUT IN
SCOTLAMD
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SCOTLAND
 IT UNFORTUNATELY INCREASED. ALIMA
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