THE GRAPH BELOW SHOWS FEMALE UNEMPLOYMENT RATES IN EACH COUNTRY OF THE UNITED KINGDOM IN 2013 AND 2014.

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THE GRAPH BELOW SHOWS FEMALE UNEMPLOYMENT RATES IN EACH COUNTRY OF THE UNITED KINGDOM IN 2013 AND 2014. GRAPH HAS 8 LINES,4 COUNTRIES,AND 2 YEARS ENGLAND IS THE MOST POPULAR COUNTRY IN

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,BUT HAD

HIGHEST

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THE HIGHEST

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FEMALE UNEMPLOYMENT

PERSANTAGE

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PERCENTAGE

IN 2013 WITH 6,8%. FORTUNATELY, IN 2014 IT DECREASED FOR 0,3 %. WALES HAD 5,4% IN 2013 AND 5,0% IN 2014. SCOTLAND HAD 6.1% IN 2013 BUT IT INCREASED

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6 % IN 2014.

NOTHERN

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NORTHERN

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iRELAND

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IRELAND

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HAD 5,6% IN 2013 AND 4,6% IN 2013,IT IS THE LOWEST PROPORTION IN THE GRAPH. CLARIFY,IN ENGLAND,WALES AND

NOTHERN

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NORTHERN

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IRELAND FEMALE UNEMPLOYMENT DECREASED IN 1 YEAR BUT IN

SCOTLAMD

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SCOTLAND

IT UNFORTUNATELY INCREASED. ALIMA

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THE GRAPH BELOW SHOWS FEMALE UNEMPLOYMENT RATES IN EACH COUNTRY OF THE UNITED KINGDOM IN 2013 AND 2014.

Some people feel that the private lives of celebrities should not be openly shared by the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree

When asked to choose between a life without work and working most of the time, people would always choose not to work. Agree or disagree.

In some countries, the difference in age between parents and children is generally greater than it was in the past. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people think that the modern communication technology is having a negative effect on social relationtips. To what extent do you agree or disagree?