The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014

The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014
The graph below shows female
unemployment
rates in the four countries of the
Uk
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UK
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.The numbers on the graph showed increasing and decreasing
percent
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per cent
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of female
unemployment
rates.We can see that England
has
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had
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a rising
percent
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percentage
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of
unemployment
in 2013, but in 2014
percent
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the percentage
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of
unemployment
dropped.Wales dropped significantly in 2013 to 5,4
percent
then
Northern Ireland to 5,6
percent
however
by 2014, Wales had dropped significantly from 5,4
percent
to 5,0
percent
although
Northern Ireland steadily
fall
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fell
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from 5,6
percent
to 4,6
percent
.
Then
England in 2013 from 6,8
percent
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per cent
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increased
then
Scotland but Scotland in 2014 dramatically rise to 6,7
percent
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per cent
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then
England to 6,5
percent
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per cent
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