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The charts gives information about the rate of electrical using for different purposes and how much time spent by the owner of houses in the year 1920 to 2019 in a country.

The charts gives information about the rate of electrical using for different purposes and how much time spent by the owner of houses in the year 1920 to 2019 in a country.
The charts
gives
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 information about the
rate
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 of electrical
using
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use
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 for different purposes and how much time
spent
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was spent
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 by the owner of houses in the
year
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 1920 to 2019 in a country.
It is clear that
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 the refrigerator used the highest
rate
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 (100%) of
electricity
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 in the
year
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 1980,
while
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 the
rate
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 of
using
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apply
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electricity
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 used by the washing machine decreased to 65% in the same
year
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.
Additionally
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, the
rate
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 of
electricity
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signeficantly
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significantly
 increased
by
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with
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 the vacuum cleaner and
reache
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reached
reach
 to peak
100
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of 100
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% in the
year
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 2000. Regarding
to
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apply
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the number of
hours
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, in the
year
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 1920, it reached
to
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apply
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the highest number
50
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of 50
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hours
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 per week,
while
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, after two decades, it nearly declined by half.
Interstingly
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Interestingly
, in the
year
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 1980, the number of
hours
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 incredibly reduced to 12
hours
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 per week. It
remaned
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remained
 unchanged from 1980 to 2000,
then
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 again
strted
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started
 to decrease to 10
hours
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 per week.
Overall
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, the
rate
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 of using
electricity
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 by households increased significantly, and the amount of time declined gradually.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, year, electricity, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity consumption
  • Household activities
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Appliance usage
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Societal shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Historical data
  • Energy consumption patterns
  • Residential design
  • Electrical equipment
  • Time spent
  • Adoption
  • Correlation
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