The charts gives information about the rate of electrical using for different purposes and how much time spent by the owner of houses in the year 1920 to 2019 in a country.

The charts gives information about the rate of electrical using for different purposes and how much time spent by the owner of houses in the year 1920 to 2019 in a country.
The charts
gives
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information about the
rate
of electrical
using
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use
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for different purposes and how much time
spent
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was spent
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by the owner of houses in the
year
1920 to 2019 in a country.
It is clear that
the refrigerator used the highest
rate
(100%) of
electricity
in the
year
1980,
while
the
rate
of
using
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electricity
used by the washing machine decreased to 65% in the same
year
.
Additionally
, the
rate
of
electricity
signeficantly
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significantly
increased
by
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the vacuum cleaner and
reache
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reached
reach
to peak
100
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of 100
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% in the
year
2000. Regarding
to
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the number of
hours
, in the
year
1920, it reached
to
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the highest number
50
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of 50
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hours
per week,
while
, after two decades, it nearly declined by half.
Interstingly
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Interestingly
, in the
year
1980, the number of
hours
incredibly reduced to 12
hours
per week. It
remaned
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remained
unchanged from 1980 to 2000,
then
again
strted
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started
to decrease to 10
hours
per week.
Overall
, the
rate
of using
electricity
by households increased significantly, and the amount of time declined gradually.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, year, electricity, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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