The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
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The given diagram illustrates the proportion of Australian males and females who did regular physical activity in 2010 by various
age
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groups.
Overall
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,
women
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from early adulthood (25 to 34) to late middle
age
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(55 to 64) seemed to do more regular physical activity than men. At the
age
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of 15 to 24, the percentage of Australian males doing regular physical activity accounted for roughly 53%,
whereas
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the percentage was slightly lower in the
women
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segment at approximately 48%.
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, it can be observed from the 25-to-34 group that the figure for the
women
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segment remained almost the same compared to the previously mentioned group,
however
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, there was a noticeable downfall in the figure for males as it dipped to about 42%. All three
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groups from the range of 35 to 64 shared the same pattern as the percentages of Australian
women
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were relatively high at almost 50% and the percentages of men still remained lower at around 40 to 45 percent.
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, the late adulthood group (65 and over) had relatively equal figures at roughly 47% for both segments.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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