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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the generation and expenditure of
electricity
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 in the primary ten notions in 2014.
Overall
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, the
production
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 of
electricity
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 was greater than the
consumption
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 of
electricity
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, and China and the US had extremely high
electricity
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compare
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compared
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 to
other
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the other
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 eight countries. It's noticeable that China was the primary country in the
production
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 and
consumption
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 of
electricity
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, which are 5398 and 5322
billion
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kWh
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 respectively. The second notion
spend
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 high
electricity
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 was the US,
it
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which
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produce
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produced
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 4099
billion
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kWh
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 and
consump
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consumed
 3866
billion
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kWh
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,
it
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which
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 was just around 1300
billion
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kWh
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 lower than China.
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, the
ultilization
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utilization
 of
electricity
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 shows a dramatic gap between the US and Russia, the US used more
3000
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than 3000
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billion
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kWh
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 than Russia. At the same time, it's
arrestive
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obvious
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 that all the countries show higher
production
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 than
consumption
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 except Germany, which used more
56
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than 56
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billion
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kWh
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electricity
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of electricity
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 than that they generated.
Futhermore
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, Russia was the least country that
have
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 the lowest difference between the
production
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 and
consumption
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 of
electricity
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, production, consumption, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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