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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the generation and expenditure of
electricity
 in the primary ten notions in 2014.
Overall
, the
production
 of
electricity
 was greater than the
consumption
 of
electricity
, and China and the US had extremely high
electricity
 usage
compare
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compared
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 to
other
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the other
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 eight countries. It's noticeable that China was the primary country in the
production
 and
consumption
 of
electricity
, which are 5398 and 5322
billion
kWh
 respectively. The second notion
spend
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spends
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 high
electricity
 was the US,
it
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which
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produce
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produced
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 4099
billion
kWh
 and
consump
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consumed
 3866
billion
kWh
,
it
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which
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 was just around 1300
billion
kWh
 lower than China.
However
, the
ultilization
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utilization
 of
electricity
 shows a dramatic gap between the US and Russia, the US used more
3000
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than 3000
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billion
kWh
 than Russia. At the same time, it's
arrestive
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obvious
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 that all the countries show higher
production
 than
consumption
 except Germany, which used more
56
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than 56
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billion
kWh
electricity
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of electricity
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 than that they generated.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, Russia was the least country that
have
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had
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 the lowest difference between the
production
 and
consumption
 of
electricity
.
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