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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999
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This
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 line chart depicts the percentage of unemployed in two countries: the US and
Japan
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 from
March
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 1993 to
March
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 1999. It is clear from the graph that the ratio decreased in the US and increased in
Japan
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.
According to
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 what is shown, the US went down respectively from 7% in
March
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 1993 to nearly 4.1% in
March
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 1999. As we can see the ratio decreased by around 2.9% in six years.
Japan
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,
on the other hand
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, climbed gradually from 2.4% in
March
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 1993 to almost 4.7% in
March
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 1999.
To sum up
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, we could say that, in the US the ratio has dropped and in
Japan
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 is sour.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, march with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unemployment rate
  • Trend
  • Comparison
  • Period
  • Sharp increase/decrease
  • Correlation
  • Economic policies
  • Technological advancements
  • Global economic conditions
  • Consumer spending
  • Social welfare
  • Public sentiment
  • Predictions
  • Economic strategies
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