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U.S. Energy Consumption - Task 1 You should spend 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows U.S. Energy Consumption by Fuel (1980-2030). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

U.S. Energy Consumption - Task 1 You should spend 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows U.S. Energy Consumption by Fuel (1980-2030). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph describes the fuel usage and the estimated
energy
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 consumption in the USA between 1980 and 2030.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 fossil fuel has a virtual monopoly and will
be continue
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continue
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to
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in
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 the future with petroleum being always the highest.
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Whereas
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apply
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,
renewable
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Renewable
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energy
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resources
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 have changed frequently
with
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while
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 remaining stable lower,
although
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 nuclear and solar/wind
resources
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 are set to be small rises in ending of the
50
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next 50
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 years. Petrol and oil commanded the largest value in 35 quadrillion units (35q) in 1980. There was a fluctuation during the first two decades,
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nevertheless
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,nevertheless
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 petroleum
energy
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 is expected to hit
a
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its
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 highest point at 50q in 2030.
In the same fashion
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, coal and natural gas have
been fluctuated
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fluctuated
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 climbing and coal surpassed natural gas by 2015. Those two
resources
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 are predicted to increase
in
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by
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 35q and 25q each by 2030. In terms of renewable
energy
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, all
resources
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 fluctuated modestly approximately 5q for the first 30 recorded years, before experiencing a period of stability. By endpoints, nuclear and solar/wind are forecasted to somewhat
growth
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grow
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 in 8q and 6q respectively with hydropower being stagnant onwards.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, resources, q with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy consumption
  • fuel sources
  • petroleum
  • natural gas
  • coal
  • renewable energy
  • hydroelectric
  • solar
  • wind
  • fossil fuels
  • upward trend
  • fluctuations
  • nuclear energy
  • steady increase
  • environmental concerns
  • technological advancements
  • projections
  • reliant
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