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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph represents the percentage of residents in five cities in Australia who have habits of buying and drinking
coffee
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 and tea.
Overall
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, the largest amount of citizens in almost all cities go to a cafeteria for
coffee
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 and tea
while
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 the number of
people
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 who bought fresh
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4
weeks
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 indicates the lowest rate. In detail, over 60% of
people
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 in
Sydney
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, Melbourne, and Hobart visit cafeterias for
coffee
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 or tea in the
last
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 4
weeks
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.
While
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, in Brisbane, only about 55% of
people
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 visited cafeterias for the same purpose, even the figure for the same category in Adelaide shows a lower rate than the number of
people
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 who bought instant
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4
weeks
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. In the case of
people
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 who bought instant
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4
weeks
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, the figures for Brisbane and Hobart represent over 50%, and these are followed by
Sydney
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, Melbourne, and Adelaide which indicate less than 50%. The percentage of residents in
Sydney
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 who bought fresh
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4
weeks
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 shows the largest amount of rate, at just below 45%, and
this
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 is followed by Melbourne at just below the figure for
Sydney
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. In Hobart, less than 40% of residents bought fresh
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4
weeks
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,
however
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, the lowest percentage of the same category is indicated in Brisbane and Adelaide at under 35%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, people, weeks, sydney with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "indicates" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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