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Parents should encourage children to spend less time studying and more time doing physical activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The following essay claims that parents should encourage their children to do more sports
instead
 of forcing them to spend all their time studying. And I partially agree with
this
 statement.
Although
, I concur with the
idea
 that
education
 is quite important, too. That's why I concur with the
idea
 that children should spend time doing both of these activities. First and foremost, I want to mention that
education
 is quite important for the
child
's future. Good
education
 does not only affect
child's
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 future
,
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 but
also
 helps them to make their outlook wider. And
this
 ability will be important in their adulthood And they would be able to have their opinion and express it.
Because in
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 my opinion,
education
 does not consist only of different kinds of school subjects, it
also
 includes finance, the ability
of
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 public
speaking
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 and expressing one's mind. But I
also
 agree with the
idea
 that
sport
 is
also
 compulsory for the development of a
child
.
Firstly
, regularly doing
sport
 helps a
person
 to be much healthier and makes a
person
 much stronger.
Also
, it was scientifically proven that doing
sport
 makes your brain work better and age less faster. I think that it is quite important for everyone.
To sum up
, I concur with the
idea
 that the
child
 should not only study
,
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 but
also
 do
sport
. By combining both of these activities a
child
 would be able healthy, smart and sociable.
Also
, I would like to mention that habits that are built in
person's
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 childhood stick to that
person
 until the end of their life. That's why during that period of time you need to build as
much
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 healthy habits as possible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Development
  • Concentration
  • Obesity
  • Burnout
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Healthy lifestyle
  • Intellectual development
  • Structured activities
  • Teamwork
  • Leadership
  • Sedentary behavior
  • Tech addiction
  • Role models
  • Family bonds
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