Parents should encourage children to spend less time studying and more time doing physical activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The following essay claims that parents should encourage their children to do more sports

instead

of forcing them to spend all their time studying. And I partially agree with

this

statement.

Although

, I concur with the

idea

that

education

is quite important, too. That's why I concur with the

idea

that children should spend time doing both of these activities. First and foremost, I want to mention that

education

is quite important for the

child

's future. Good

education

does not only affect

child's

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future

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but

also

helps them to make their outlook wider. And

this

ability will be important in their adulthood And they would be able to have their opinion and express it.

Because in

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my opinion,

education

does not consist only of different kinds of school subjects, it

also

includes finance, the ability

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public

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and expressing one's mind. But I

also

agree with the

idea

that

sport

is

also

compulsory for the development of a

child

.

Firstly

, regularly doing

sport

helps a

person

to be much healthier and makes a

person

much stronger.

Also

, it was scientifically proven that doing

sport

makes your brain work better and age less faster. I think that it is quite important for everyone.

To sum up

, I concur with the

idea

that the

child

should not only study

,

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but

also

do

sport

. By combining both of these activities a

child

would be able healthy, smart and sociable.

Also

, I would like to mention that habits that are built in

person's

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childhood stick to that

person

until the end of their life. That's why during that period of time you need to build as

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healthy habits as possible.