The given charts provides information about change in tourism in Australia and Germany from 1960 to 2010.

The given charts provides information about change in tourism in Australia and Germany from 1960 to 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The given charts provides information about change in tourism in Australia and Germany from 1960 to 2010.
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provides
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information about
change
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the change
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in tourism in Australia and Germany from 1960 to 2010. Generally speaking, the vast majority of visitors in both
countries
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eventually came from Europe rather than other territories. Upon initial observation, it becomes evident that the total number of tourists from Asian
countries
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increased 6 times during the period in Australia. Compared to it, in Germany
this
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kind of jump in
percent
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the percentage
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of Asian visitors was not noticed,
however
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indicated
15
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a 15
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%
of
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rise. A closer example of the diagrams revealed that the
percents
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percentage
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of
british
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tourists decreased in both
countries
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throughout
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over
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the
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time. In comparison with that, the change in percents of American visitors
have
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dissimilar patterns in
aforementioned
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the aforementioned
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before
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countries
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. In Germany, the number of tourists from
USA
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the USA
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reached 29% from 25%,
although
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, in
Australia
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,Australia
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this
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number dropped to 7%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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