The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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,families’ costs changed in these years.
Firstly
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,
i
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want to start with food.Families spent 35 % of their income
for
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food in 1968.But,
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percentage changed in 2018,it was be average
17
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of 17
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%. The second
one
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is housing.It consisted of 10 % in 1968.
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However
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this
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percentage increased about 9 % in 2018. The third
one
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is the spending
for
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fuel and power,which is
needable
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readable
needle
in
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at
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every time.The rate of
this
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is 6 %.But it
discreased
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decreased
increased
in 2018.The other comparison about
the
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apply
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Clothing and
footware
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footwear
, in 1968 spending
for
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apply
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them
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more than
2018
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in 2018
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. It’s interesting that the
cost’s
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cost
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rate of household goods was equal in 1968 and 2018.
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, the information about
the
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personal goods is
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noted. It is less than in 2018.The other
one
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is
transport
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the transport
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fee.
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only 8 % in 1968.But,
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percent
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changed in 2018.Eventually, the
last
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one
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is leisure.There was
big
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a big
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difference in
these field
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.So, the percentage in 2018
approximately
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was approximately
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three times more than in 1968.
This
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research
displeys
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displays
us
more
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with more
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interesting facts about it.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words one with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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