The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Overall
,families’ costs changed in these years.Linking Words
Firstly
, Linking Words
i
want to start with food.Families spent 35 % of their income Change the capitalization
I
for
food in 1968.But, Change preposition
on
this
percentage changed in 2018,it was be average Linking Words
17
%. The second Change preposition
of 17
one
is housing.It consisted of 10 % in 1968.Use synonyms
Linking Words
However
Add a comma
,However
this
percentage increased about 9 % in 2018. The third Linking Words
one
is the spending Use synonyms
for
fuel and power,which is Change preposition
on
needable
Correct your spelling
readable
needle
in
every time.The rate of Change preposition
at
this
is 6 %.But it Linking Words
discreased
in 2018.The other comparison about Correct your spelling
decreased
increased
the
Clothing and Correct article usage
apply
footware
, in 1968 spending Correct your spelling
footwear
for
Change preposition
apply
them
more than Correct pronoun usage
apply
2018
. It’s interesting that the Change preposition
in 2018
cost’s
rate of household goods was equal in 1968 and 2018.Change noun form
cost
Also
, the information about Linking Words
the
personal goods is Correct article usage
apply
also
noted. It is less than in 2018.The other Linking Words
one
is Use synonyms
transport
fee.Correct article usage
the transport
It’s
only 8 % in 1968.But, Wrong verb form
It was
this
Linking Words
percent
changed in 2018.Eventually, the Replace the word
percentage
last
Linking Words
one
is leisure.There was Use synonyms
big
difference in Add an article
a big
the big
these field
.So, the percentage in 2018 Change the determiner
this field
these fields
approximately
three times more than in 1968.Add a missing verb
was approximately
This
research Linking Words
displeys
us Correct your spelling
displays
more
interesting facts about it.Change preposition
with more
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