The chart below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world

The chart below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of  the world
These pie charts show the amount of
water
that was used for distinct aims in six different regions
in
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the world.
Overall
,
it is clear that
agricultural
use
of
water
was dominant in most of the areas.
While
water
used for domestic
purpose
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purposes
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seems to account for less than others. Looking at the charts more closely, one can see that in North America and Europe,
water
for industrial
use
represented around 50%; 48% and 53
percent
relatively
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. The second importance in order of two these regions was agricultural
use
and domestic
use
wasn’t noticed much.
In contrast
, the rest of
areas
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the areas
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invented
water
mostly into agriculture up to the highest point
88
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percent
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in Central Asia. The amount of
water
used for
industry
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the industry
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was more than domestically in South East Asia
while
three other areas used
water
in larger quantity domestically than for industry including South America, 19
percent
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compared to 10%, Africa 9
percent
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • percentage
  • water usage
  • agriculture
  • industrial use
  • domestic consumption
  • energy production
  • recreation
  • regions
  • sectors
  • overall
  • accounts for
  • ranging from
  • relatively low
  • in contrast
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
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