You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
These pie charts demonstrate to what portion of the
electricity
each
source
of
power
contributed in
two
categories of all types and
renewables
. There are
two
charts shown for
Germany
and
two
for France both of which relate to 2009. In
Germany
, conventional thermal amounted
for
Change preposition
to
show examples
almost 60% of the total
power
.
Furthermore
, nuclear was responsible for a bit over a fifth of the total energy and
lastly
,
renewables
are the
source
of a little below a fifth of the total
electricity
.
Moreover
, biomass and wind, combined contributed over
two thirds
Add a hyphen
two-thirds
show examples
of
renewables
with equal portions and the rest is provided by hydroelectric and solar energies.
On the other hand
, nuclear
power
provided
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provides
show examples
more than
three quarters
Add a hyphen
three-quarters
show examples
of the total
electricity
.
Also
, renewable energies were held accountable for almost 13% of the whole
electricity
while
conventional thermal only produced 10% of the
power
.
However
, hydroelectric produced nearly
four fifth
Add a hyphen
four-fifth
show examples
of the total renewable
power
while
wind, biomass and solar contributed way less than that.
Although
geothermal
power
is mentioned, it contributes almost nothing to the total
power
whatsoever. Even though both countries use
renewables
for only about a fifth of their total
electricity
, France relied heavily on nuclear
power
.
Instead
, conventional thermal was the most prevalent
source
of energy in
Germany
.
Also
among the renewable sources, hydroelectric was the dominating
source
in France
while
biomass and wind were the ones with the most participation in
renewables
in
Germany
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, source, power, two, renewables, germany with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.

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