the economic growth in developing and developed countries is making people richer. However the research indicates that people in the developing countries is happier than people in developed countries. What is your opinion on this?

It is undeniable that with economic development comes
wealthier
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population.
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, It is important to think about why recent
researches
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showed that developing
countries
are contented with economic growth
while
developed
countries
are less happy with that. In
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essay, I will state my opinion
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matter and explain some reasons. In my opinion, there are several factors that make the population of developing
countries
more satisfied with economic growth. First of all, citizens of these nations have lived in impoverished conditions, so when the country's conditions improve
this
means more money for the people.
Furthermore
, economic augmentation means more
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facilities
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subsequently
,
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life conditions.
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, if a
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family
lives in
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and dirty area, they can now move to a better place and have a good education. To sum it up, there are more incentives for the people of developing
countries
to be happy for economic
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heightening
. As the citizens of the developed
countries
already have several
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amenities
for
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life.
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