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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects other believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to study for a qualification

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Some
students
 tend to allocate all of their attention to
one
 specific task to obtain more and more
knowledge
 about it
while
 others hold
this
 view that we should concentrate on several
tasks
 at the same time, not just a certain subject. I personally take the second view but with some considerations.
To begin
 with, it is crucial to provide a platform for
students
 to identify their
favorite
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 subject and not restrict them in their decisions in order to choose
one
 main major.
This
 will not happen unless they have opportunities to explore different
tasks
 and choose
one
 of them.
However
, I believe
this
 approach is suitable for
bachelor's
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 level, not for the entire education.
In other words
, all of the
tasks
 that are relevant to science or related to each other and we cannot have a deep understanding of certain
tasks
 without having a broad
knowledge
 of
tasks
 related to them. Taking mechanical engineering as an example,
those
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 who need to design equipment for a specific atmosphere, how can they design it without
knowledge
 about its atmospheric conditions or some destructive tests like corrosion?
Nevertheless
, they should have insight into another major, not only focusing on mechanical courses, which could lead to some severe problems in their future careers.
However
,
this
 view should be implemented just at the bachelor's degree level.
Students
 can choose a field they are interested in during the three or four years of the time period, and in higher education, they can focus on a particular major with a broad
knowledge
 of relevant subjects.
To conclude
, in my firm conviction, well-informed
students
 should have an insight into several majors, not only focusing on a specific
one
, and
this
 platform should be provided at the bachelor's degree level for them.
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