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The graph below shows the amount of goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002.

The graph below shows the amount of goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002.
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The line graph demonstrates the weight of
items
 delivered in the United Kingdom between 1974 and 2002 and the ways of their delivery, namely, roads, water,
pipelines
 and
rails
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rail
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.
Overall
, as it is illustrated there was a slight fluctuation with an upward trend in the amount of goods that were transported via road and
this
 kind of delivery was the most popular among others,
whereas
 the smallest quantity of different
items
were
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was
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 delivered using
pipelines
 in the UK from 1974 to 2009. Between 1974 and 1978 figures that showed the situation with things transported by ships and trains equalized and accounted for 40
million
tones
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tonnes
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,
however
, from 1978 and by the end of the period there were different patterns, which made up approximately 61
million
tones
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tonnes
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 and 41
million
tones
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tonnes
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, respectively.
Initially
, the number of cargoes that
were
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was
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 distributed by roads constituted about 70
million
tones
, which was 30
million
tones
 more than the amount of those that were shipped and
items
 that went along the rail tracks,
although
, in 1994 there was a rapid increase in
million
 tonnes of products delivered by lorries , which made up almost 100
million
tones
 by the end of the observed timeline. At the beginning of the
period
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 there were no goods transported by
pipelines
,
however
, in 1978 the number of
items
 distributed by
pipelines
 rose rapidly, accounting for about 18
million
 tonnes, which was approximately a quarter of goods delivered by camion. By the end of the observed period, the data that demonstrated things transported by special channels had climbed slightly and constituted just over 20
million
tones
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tonnes
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, which was an insignificant number compared to other categories.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words items, pipelines, million, tones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapid" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • amount
  • transported
  • UK
  • increased
  • significantly
  • 28-year period
  • first decade
  • steady increase
  • significant jump
  • highest point
  • gradual decline
  • minor increase
  • dropped
  • similar level
  • goods
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