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Films and computer games containing violence are popular. Some people say they have negative effects on society and should be banned. Others say they are just harmless relaxation. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is a reality that violent
movies
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 and
video
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games
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 are becoming prevalent in modern
society
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.
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 some contend that it has detrimental effects on people and
society
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 and ought to be outlawed, others think that these activities are simply good ways to unwind. I concur with these points of view and will talk about them in
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 post. On the one hand, youngsters often mimic violent
behavior
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 they see in
movies
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 or
video
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games
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, which is one of the main reasons why they have a negative impact on
society
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.
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, children are drawn to the dramatic violence and interest in these violent
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games
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, particularly Counterstrike, and desire to practice their actions in real life. The second explanation is that youngsters are more likely to develop a gaming addiction. Children are
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 too lethargic to engage in outside activities and would develop obesity.
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, the benefits of
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 and
video
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games
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 for
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 come from the fact that kids can refuel after watching or playing them.
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, many individuals unwind by watching
esport
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esports
sports
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 tournaments, which are developed annually with the aim of entertaining people and promoting
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games
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 worldwide.
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, these violent
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 and activities, particularly
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games
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, may aid in the development of new friendships for the children
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 enhance cognitive plasticity. In conclusion, even
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 violent
movies
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 and
video
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games
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 are bad for
society
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, they can
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 be helpful for youngsters in terms of useful relaxation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitize
  • aggressive behavior
  • glorify
  • artistic expression
  • pent-up emotions
  • media consumption
  • model for conflict resolution
  • fiction vs. reality
  • outlet for frustration
  • conclusive evidence
  • social influences
  • real-world aggression
  • interaction
  • imitation
  • controlled environment
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