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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the data about how
families
 in one country spent their weekly income in 2 different years, in 1968 and in 2018.
Overall
, there were fluctuated in the figures for each, it is noticeable that food was the most common in
families
' spending
while
 the need for fuel and power was the least. In 1986, food was the most spending
things
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thing
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 that
families
 afford, it took 35%,
clothing
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and clothing
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,
footware
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footwear
 and housing took 10%
in
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of
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families
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family
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 spending.
Suprisingly
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Surprisingly
, either housing or personal goods, transport and leisure have approximately figures, about 8% each, fuel and power were the least things that
families
 afford to buy, with only 6%. There were a lot of changes in the percentages of spending from
families
 in 2018. Unexpectedly, leisure ranked first in
families
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family
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 spending, with 22%, followed by housing with 19%, food was lower than
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housing at
housing
housingat
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housing at
2%, transport with 14% and household goods still maintained the same data after
long
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 time, the others facilities
such
 as clothing and
footware
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footwear
, personal goods, fuel and power, those have the figures which were lower than 5%
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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