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The use of cellphones has increased in this twenty-first century. Additionally, Cellphones can now be used for many purposes besides of making calls only. What are the advantages and disadvantages

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Nowadays, mobile
phone
 has grown and are common uses .
In addition
, there are wide uses of mobile
phones
 rather than making calls.
However
, it has both sides, advantages and
disadvantages
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides. On the one hand, most
people
 prefer to
use
 cell
phones
 rather than other devices for a variety of reasons.
Firstly
, it has many different applications which help
people
 to do their work
such
 as the bank app, shopping sites and social media programmes.
For example
, some
people
use
 the bank app to pay for their electricity, water or even their
phone
 bells.
Moreover
, a lot of shopyholic
people
use
 a mobile
phone
 to serve the new products and pay a different goods.
Also
, the younger generation accesses social media programmes by using mobile
phones
.
Secondly
,
people
 can carry it easily and
use
 it anywhere and any place.
On the other hand
, there are
disadvantages
 to using a mobile
phone
. Some
people
use
 it to make a noise for others. And many thieves stole money from the population by using mobile
phones
.
Also
, children need observation control when they
use
 a mobile
phone
 because it has many bad advertisements appearing when using the Internet. In conclusion, cell
phones
 have both sides advantages and
disadvantages
.
However
, their advantages are more than
disadvantages
 and we can
use
 them without more worry.
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