The chart below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of world
The charts show the
percentage
of water
used for different purposes including: Industrial use
, Agricultural use
and Domestic use
in 6 areas of the world.
At first,
we can see that, most of the percentage
was use
for Agricultural Change the form of the verb
used
use
in AFRICA, SOUTH AMERICA
, CENTRAL ASIA
and SOUTH EAST ASIA
while
in NORTH AMERICA
and EUROPE
most of the Add a comma
,EUROPE
water
was use
for Industrial Change the form of the verb
used
use
. And the percentage
of water
was use
for Wrong verb form
used
Agricultural
just in the second.
Replace the word
agriculture
While
the percentage
of water
use
for Industrial in EUROPE and NORTH AMERICA
are
higher than Agricultural Change the verb form
is
use
, the percentage
use
Replace the word
used
for
Industrial in 4 other areas Change preposition
by
were
much lower than Change the verb form
was
Change preposition
for Agricultural
Agricultural
. Replace the word
agriculture
For instance
, the percentage
of Industrial use
was in the second rank
in SOUTH EAST ASIA
and was in the lowest rank
in AFRICA, SOUTH AMERICA
and CENTRAL ASIA
.
The percentage
of Domestic use
was reaching the lowest rank
in SOUTH EAST ASIA
, EUROPE and NORTH AMERICA
. While
it was in the second rank
in 3 other areas.
Overall
, the percentage
was use
most is for Agricultural and Industrial.Wrong verb form
used
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, water, use, america, asia, rank with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 8 times.
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