The chart below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of world

The chart below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of world
The charts show the
percentage
of
water
used for different purposes including: Industrial
use
, Agricultural
use
and Domestic
use
in 6 areas of the world. At
first,
we can see that, most of the
percentage
was
use
Change the form of the verb
used
show examples
for Agricultural
use
in AFRICA, SOUTH
AMERICA
, CENTRAL
ASIA
and SOUTH EAST
ASIA
while
in NORTH
AMERICA
and
EUROPE
Add a comma
,EUROPE
show examples
most of the
water
was
use
Change the form of the verb
used
show examples
for Industrial
use
. And the
percentage
of
water
was
use
Wrong verb form
used
show examples
for
Agricultural
Replace the word
agriculture
show examples
just in the second.
While
the
percentage
of
water
use
for Industrial in EUROPE and NORTH
AMERICA
are
Change the verb form
is
show examples
higher than Agricultural
use
, the
percentage
use
Replace the word
used
show examples
for
Change preposition
by
show examples
Industrial in 4 other areas
were
Change the verb form
was
show examples
much lower than
Change preposition
for Agricultural
show examples
Agricultural
Replace the word
agriculture
show examples
.
For instance
, the
percentage
of Industrial
use
was in the second
rank
in SOUTH EAST
ASIA
and was in the lowest
rank
in AFRICA, SOUTH
AMERICA
and CENTRAL
ASIA
. The
percentage
of Domestic
use
was reaching the lowest
rank
in SOUTH EAST
ASIA
, EUROPE and NORTH
AMERICA
.
While
it was in the second
rank
in 3 other areas.
Overall
, the
percentage
was
use
Wrong verb form
used
show examples
most is for Agricultural and Industrial.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, water, use, america, asia, rank with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 8 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • percentage
  • water usage
  • agriculture
  • industrial use
  • domestic consumption
  • energy production
  • recreation
  • regions
  • sectors
  • overall
  • accounts for
  • ranging from
  • relatively low
  • in contrast
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
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