The chart below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of world

The chart below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of world
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The charts show the
percentage
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of
water
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used for different purposes including: Industrial
use
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, Agricultural
use
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and Domestic
use
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in 6 areas of the world. At
first,
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we can see that, most of the
percentage
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was
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use
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used
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for Agricultural
use
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in AFRICA, SOUTH
AMERICA
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, CENTRAL
ASIA
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and SOUTH EAST
ASIA
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while
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in NORTH
AMERICA
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and
EUROPE
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,EUROPE
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most of the
water
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was
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use
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used
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for Industrial
use
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. And the
percentage
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of
water
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was
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use
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used
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for
Agricultural
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agriculture
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just in the second.
While
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the
percentage
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of
water
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use
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for Industrial in EUROPE and NORTH
AMERICA
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are
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is
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higher than Agricultural
use
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, the
percentage
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use
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used
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for
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by
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Industrial in 4 other areas
were
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was
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much lower than
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for Agricultural
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Agricultural
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agriculture
show examples
.
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, the
percentage
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of Industrial
use
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was in the second
rank
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in SOUTH EAST
ASIA
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and was in the lowest
rank
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in AFRICA, SOUTH
AMERICA
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and CENTRAL
ASIA
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. The
percentage
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of Domestic
use
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was reaching the lowest
rank
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in SOUTH EAST
ASIA
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, EUROPE and NORTH
AMERICA
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.
While
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it was in the second
rank
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in 3 other areas.
Overall
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, the
percentage
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was
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use
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used
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most is for Agricultural and Industrial.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, water, use, america, asia, rank with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 8 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • percentage
  • water usage
  • agriculture
  • industrial use
  • domestic consumption
  • energy production
  • recreation
  • regions
  • sectors
  • overall
  • accounts for
  • ranging from
  • relatively low
  • in contrast
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
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