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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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In the given map we see a sports
center
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 in an institute, before and after its development.
Overall
, in
before
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image
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,image
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 we observe only one
pool
 and one changing room.
However
, after renovation, now the same
center
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 has
two
 pools and three changing rooms.
To begin
 with, if we look at the
center
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 now, we will find
two
 outdoor courts, one on the west and
other
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the other
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 on
right
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the right
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 of the main building.
While
 inside the main
building
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,building
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 the reception is in front of
entrance
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the entrance
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 i.e., in the south.
Whereas
 a 25m
pool
 can be seen in the
center
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centre
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 of
building
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the building
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. The changing room, gym and seating are located
to
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on
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 the west, north and east side of
pool
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the pool
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 respectively.
Furthermore
,
for
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in
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 the
future
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,future
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 the university plans to make a lot of changes
such
 as
,
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apply
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 finishing the concept of
outdoors
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the outdoors
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 and all activities to be done inside now. A leisure
pool
 has been added in the west of
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the center
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center
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centre
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. New facilities are added as well i.e.,
Two
 dance studios
on
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in
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 the east, a sports hall in the middle and a café to the south of
hall
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the hall
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.
In addition
 to that,
two
 more changing rooms are
also
 built.
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