You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The bar charts compare the proportion of Australian and non-Australian people who have been living in modern
cities
,
towns
and rural
areas
over the period between 1995 and 2010.
Overall
, residents of the
cities
formed the highest percentage over the given period, whilst, countryside residents formed the least percentage in
this
period, except for the non-Australian
peoplein
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people in
people
2010.
To begin
with, in 1995, most Australians lived in
cities
with nearly 50%,
while
about 60% of the non-natives lived in urban regions. Rural
areas
were densely populated by citizens, approximately 35% for
Austarlian
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Australian
and 40% for people outside Australia.
Towns
were the least favourite choice with about 20% of Australian residents and 15%
for
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of
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citizens outside Australia.
On the other hand
, in 2010, the percentage of
peoples
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people
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who lived in the
cities
increased significantly by 20% for both Australians and non-natives.
Towns
and rural
areas
also
showed a great decline
for
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in
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the natives
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natives
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population where both of them formed about 15%. Whilst the non-natives percentages halved in
towns
and showed a huge decrease
by
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of
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about 10% in rural
areas
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, towns, areas with synonyms.
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