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In the past people liked to store knowledge in books. However, in the present, we prefer to store knowledge on the Internet. Do you think the advantages outweight the disadvantages?

#people #store #books #internet #outweight
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people
 liked to get
khowledge
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knowledge
 from books. But nowadays
people
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khowledge
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knowledge
from
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internet
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.I think that
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 of storing
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khowledge
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knowledge
from
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is
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 more than the disadvantages. I want to start with the advantages of
this
 view. First of
all
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 you can't find all the
information
 in books ,but
in
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the Internet
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Internet
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 it is very easy to find all the
information
.
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 you want to find
information
 about cells you need to find
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this
 book and it will
get
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save
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your
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 time.
Second
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 advantage is that if you want to find more
information
 you can find it
from
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internet
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. Like if you want to find
about
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out about
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a cell
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cell
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cells
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 you can find everything about it on
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internet
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 but in
books
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 you can't find everything you can find general
thing's
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 about
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the cell
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cell
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.
Secondly
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 I want to talk about its one disadvantage.
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 disadvantage is that it will
effect
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to
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your health.
Scientist
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had
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 proved that if you will use
telephone
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the telephone
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with
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not
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no
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 limited time it will
effect
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affect
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to
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your
nerve
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 system and
also
to
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your eyes.
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4,5
milliard
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people
 1.0%of them given their health . It seems that 1.0% is a small amount, but it is 45 million
people
. In conclusion, I want to say that
Internet
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 is better for getting
an
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Information
 you can find anything
from
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 the
Internet
 but it has
also
 disadvantages . Because if you learn from
Internet
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the Internet
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 it will cause
to
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your health
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital literacy
  • Accessibility
  • Multimedia
  • Hyperlinked
  • E-publishing
  • Sustainability
  • Information overload
  • Obsolescence
  • Cybersecurity
  • Digital divide
  • Intellectual property
  • Critical thinking
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