In the past people liked to store knowledge in books. However, in the present, we prefer to store knowledge on the Internet. Do you think the advantages outweight the disadvantages?

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view.In the past
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knowledge
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.I think that
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more than the disadvantages. I want to start with the advantages of
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you can't find all the
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it is very easy to find all the
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book and it will
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advantage is that if you want to find more
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you can find everything about it on
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but in
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you can't find everything you can find general
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I want to talk about its one disadvantage.
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your health.
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proved that if you will use
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with
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not
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limited time it will
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your
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system and
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your eyes.
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people
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1.0%of them given their health . It seems that 1.0% is a small amount, but it is 45 million
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. In conclusion, I want to say that
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you can find anything
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but it has
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disadvantages . Because if you learn from
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it will cause
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your health
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital literacy
  • Accessibility
  • Multimedia
  • Hyperlinked
  • E-publishing
  • Sustainability
  • Information overload
  • Obsolescence
  • Cybersecurity
  • Digital divide
  • Intellectual property
  • Critical thinking
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