The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the different day-to-day activities done by working individuals in two distinct
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1958 and 2008. Data presented in prsentage.
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, it can be seen that in five decades there have been dramatic changes observed in the work and gathering. In the
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1958, over to quarter of the population was more likely to be seen engaged in work and sleep which was 32 and 33% respectively.
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,
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ratio changed in 50
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of time and people got more inclined toward work which
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the highest at 45% of all other activities and the percentage of sleep gt dropped by 12. In 1958, the travelling ratio of individuals was just 2% which increased by 8% in the period 2008.
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, interest in leisure activities remained constant in both the
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. In the
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1958, people used to prefer going out for family and friend meetings which was 19%,
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, it reduced considerably in the
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2008 and fell to 6%. percentage of relaxation had
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in subsequent
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which was
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reported at
8% in 1958 and increased up to 13 % in the
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2008.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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