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females are better students than males or not. Dicuss both views and give your opinion

#females #students #males #dicuss
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Males study worse than males or not is debated. In my perspective,
females
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 can do better because of concentration. Some people believe that the self-control behaviour of female
women
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 can make them study better. To explain it
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, from the past to the present, most
females
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 have the cultural stereotype so their behaviour is controlled strictly. To live with that belief,
women
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 must be good at dealing with problems leading to they can tackle and solution for homework correctly and suitably too.
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, better education will come to those who pay can have a great deal Another point is the sense of sensitivity to the calculation would push males. are better students. To put it more clearly, in fact, most men are not as good at imagining as On imagining as
women
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 they always pay attention to counting, figures and data
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 quite difficult to adapt to as it is boring
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 male brain just looks toward the logical objects and is interested in what is difficult to solve. For ,example Math
females
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 spend a lot of time remembering the recipe
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 men can understand and apply it fluently during the lesson. In my view,
females
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 can be better at studying to the ability of attention. Most
women
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 always have a plan for the day, week, month or year so they can decide what they need to do right now They can organise what they should spend time on.
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, female students do more homework than boys do as they know how important it is to do homework and reduce unnecessary activities.
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, more attention more great results in the study. In conclusion,
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 being good at central calculation,
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 are much better students as they not only focus on central issues but
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 self-discipline.
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