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The chart beiow shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart beiow shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given bar chart represents how many people lived in owned and rented houses in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
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,
households
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 in owned
accommodation
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 showed a downward trend
while
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households
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 in rented
accommodation
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 indicated an upward trend during the given period. In detail, the percentage of
households
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 in owned
accommodation
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, steadily climbed from over 20% to 50% from 1918 to 1971, which levelled out at over 30% between 1939 and 1953. After 1971, when the percentage of both figures indicated the same rate, the figure for
households
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 in owned
accommodation
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 started increasing to approximately 70% by 2001,
whereas
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 decreased to about 65% in 2011. In the case of
households
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 in rented houses decreased from below 80% to approximately 60% between 1918 and 1961, which levelled out from 1939 to 1953 at under 70%. After 1971, when both figures represented the same rate at 50%, the number of people who lived in rented homes declined to just over 30% until 2001,
however
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, it rose to just over 35% after the decade.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, accommodation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "indicated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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