The diagram blow shows how rain water is collected and converted to drinking water in an Australian town. Write a report for university lecturer.

The diagram blow shows how rain water is collected and converted to drinking water in an Australian town. Write a report for university lecturer.
This
linear chart illustrates the method
of
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, that
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use
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to produce fresh
water
from
the
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rain
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rainwater
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water
in
Australian
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the Australian
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city
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.
Overall
, four major steps
included
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into
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the process, which started from collecting
rain
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rainwater
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water
untill
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until
pumping fresh
water
to
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the houses.
Initially
,
tanks
are
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located near the houses, which
use
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for collecting rain
water
, that
falling
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on the roof of the house. After that, the
water
, which is in the
tanks
are
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being
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drained through the
water
filter using tubes, which have been fixed
bottem
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bottom
of the three
tanks
. In the next step, filtered
water
is stored in the
water
storage which
located
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next to the filter.
Then
this
water
suppose
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to be sent to
the
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another tank, which is placed left side next to the storage,
for
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to add chemicals
as
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water
treatment through
pipe
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a pipe
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that
interconnected
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on the bottom sides of
the
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both
tanks
.
However
, after adding chemicals from the lid, which
fixed
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on the top of the
water
treatment tank, clean
water
distributed
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was distributed
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to the houses through tubes, which
connected
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were connected
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to the residents from
second
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tank.
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