In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Elder

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The elderly

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population are certainly one of the most vulnerable people. As we know, they usually need specific health care and one part of them

are

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mostly alone. Another group doesn’t have enough income to provide

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apply

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themselves

basic

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needs. First of all, I truly believe that all humans deserve to live their

life

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with dignity. Indeed, the crucial point is the wellbeing of the old people. If the

government

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give them some economic

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for

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to

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increase

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their

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quality of

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life

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, it

became

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necessary to establish who can receive governmental help.

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build

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builds

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the

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parameters like monthly income, propriety, and health conditions, that can help to identify who can live in the hospice with governmental

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. I think in

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kind of situation the

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has to give them what

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necessary to live their

life

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with dignity.

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, the other side of the coin tells us that there are old people who have enough money to spend the

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part of their time in excellent condition.

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, they are able to reach high

life

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standard

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like private care, private nurses, and family

support

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condition

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the

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can invest public money in other fields. In conclusion, elders are often experiencing loneliness because their families reside far from them or don’t have any other family members. I assume that the

government

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has to take care of the most vulnerable elders who are not able to buy their medication or food.

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, the

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can provide

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them

some

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public space to

support

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community and facilitate relationships.