The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the
amount
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of male adults that smoke across seven countries in percentages and examines the comparison alongside the world's average over a fifteen-year period. Over time, we can establish that there is a decrease in male
smokers
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over time,
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Bangladesh and Armenia had the largest male smoking population in 2000 and had declined by a fourth by the end of the period.
This
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decline has been overtaken by Cuba, Egypt and Lebanon, which is more than the initial figures
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Armenia, with almost 70% of the adult male population smoking is the highest of
smokers
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, in comparison is a third more than the world's standard. By the end of the period, it had witnessed a reduction of 20% of male
smokers
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In second is Bangladeshi men at 60%, accounting for almost double the statistics in other countries. It had seen a reduction by a fourth in 2015. Over half of Cuba's male population are
smokers
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, almost double the figures in comparison with its Australian counterparts. Cuba's male
smokers
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have not altered significantly.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words smokers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduction" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart, percentage, adult male smokers
  • world average, increased, decreased
  • tobacco consumption, lung cancer
  • public health, awareness campaigns
  • government policy, smoking bans
  • health risks, nicotine, tobacco industry
  • chart analysis, data comparison
  • statistical trend, significant fluctuation
  • stagnation, steady rise, moderate fall
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