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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it

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Dear Mr. John Pitt, I am writing to express my interest
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 in our head office in London in deputation for six months. I have been working in our institution for
last
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 five years. During
this
 period I have done my best and
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 best employee of the organisation. I have been going through
difficult
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 time in my life after I lost Jennifer, my girlfriend, in an accident
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last
 month. I require a change in my life,
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 I would like to stay with my mother in England for some time.
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 I am requesting to
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 in our head office for six months. I will complete my ongoing project
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end
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 of
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 month. The remaining work will be handed over to Jay,
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I have discussed
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him
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the timeline, and he is ready to accommodate my work. I am requesting your help to discuss the matter with the director to get approval. As you have been working in the head office for several years your advice will help me adapt more easily to the new workplace. I look forward to hearing from you, Yours sincerely, May Aann
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  • moreover
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  • however
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional development
  • global operations
  • cross-functional
  • remote work
  • progress updates
  • logistical arrangements
  • cultural exchange
  • continuity plan
  • enhance my skillset
  • broaden my horizons
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