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What do you think are the most important characteristics for a job you have had or you want to have? Use specific details and examples to support your opinion.

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Nowadays there are a lot of types of jobs and not always
we
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enter a
company
 that fulfil our expectations. So, when being interviewed is very important to know how their leaders treat their employees and how they provide quality time for the
team
 to integrate. In
this
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 I will show two characteristics of what I think is most important for me. On the one hand, I believe that a
company
 should make their employees feel like part of the
team
, with a sense of belonging and it happens when the
company
 makes an effort to integrate everyone in something like a happy hour, end-year party, prizes, etc.
Therefore
 not only making the
team
 more accustomed with each other but
also
 more willing to do the best for the
company
, as a family.
Moreover
, it is totally dependent on the fact that when a good leader is a person accessible,
it
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 motivates the
team
, and is always inclined to listen and solve problems the
work flows
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 so as the
company
. To illustrate, when I worked in a Multinational
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of
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Oil
& Gas
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and gas
Company
, I had a leader who was throughout the day willing to help me with any doubt I could have in the first week of
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job
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. In the following days, she kept teaching me, helping me and being very pleasant, making me miss her a lot
now
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. Considering all the above,
this
 essay showed two main ideas of what I consider most important when I am looking for a job and what I passed through working in a good
company
. Personally, my experience created in me a level that now makes a lot difference of
to
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 what extent I accept some treatments and what to avoid and run away from, never considering work somewhere people mistreat me.
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