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Some workers must work at night. What are the advantages and disadvantages of night-shift work? Give reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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It is known that the world does not stop and work is developed day and
night
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, 24 hours per day, 7 days a week. For people who work
night
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shifts
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 there are some advantages and disadvantages that are worth the risk of taking the job. In
this
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essay
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 I will discuss the pros and cons of working at
night
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,
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however
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apply
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to what extent?
To begin
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 with the advantages of a
night
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 shift, we have the possibility of days free where we can resolve all of our stuff without stress because we have
time
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 to do it.
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, money will not be a problem
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 of the extra bonus.
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 type of job is not for everyone
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 some complications that can appear as
season
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the season
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 passes.
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, the disadvantages of going against the grain become highly remarkable when we realize that family
time
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 starts to be a sacrifice
in
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as
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consequence
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a consequence
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 of our sleep.
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,
althought
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although
 I had
tell
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told
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 that we have more
time
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 to "resolve our stuff",
that
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the
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 necessity to take a nap at least for
few
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a few
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 hours is urgent after leaving the workstation. So,
while
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 we get more money despite less
time
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 with family, we develop health problems too, like high blood pressure
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 stress, even though we do not notice it. In brief,
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 essay showed that quality of life exists when you ignore that it has an expiration date too. Having much money and availability to go out
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 the sun is out, is good.
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, there will be a
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 you will pay for it with your health and your family. Personally, I am a nurse and sometimes I do not have the choice to work day-shift but I do not look at
night
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 shifts as a monster, I face it as an experience and a chance of a change in atmosphere that will not
last
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 forever.
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