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The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003.

The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003.
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The line graph illustrates, the amount of
visitors
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 to a museum in the UK in two seasons (
summer
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 and winter) in 2003.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 in
summer
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 is more than in winter.
Furthermore
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,
visitors
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 prefer visiting the museum between 9:00 am and 12:00 pm, and
this
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 amount decreased after the mid-day. Regarding the
number
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 of
visitors
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 in
summer
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, it began at 9:00 a.m. and climbed rapidly to around 1300
visitors
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 at 10:00 a.m. Between 10:00 am and 12:00 pm, there is a slight increase in the
number
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 of
visitors
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 at around 1500, which is the highest amount in
summer
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, before falling gradually after 12:00 pm to 16:00 pm,
then
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 drop dramatically before closing at 18:00 pm.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 in winter fluctuated at around 450 to 550
visitors
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 from 9:00 am to almost 11:30 am.
This
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 figure, decreased from 12:00 pm to 14:30 pm
then
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 remain stable to 18:00 pm.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, summer, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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