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Que: Environmental problems are too big for individual countries and individual people to address. We have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is to address it at an international level. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is argued that environmental problems are massive and laborious for countries and
people
 to handle individually and require global intervention to tackle them. I disagree with the statement that environmental issues can only be handled at an international level.
This
 essay will first look at how the public awareness of environmental
protection
 and internal government intervention through environmental laws, sanctions and penalties can reduce
this
 imperative problem.
Firstly
, public awareness of environmental
protection
 through media campaigns and school curricula can educate
people
 about the diverse effects of polluting the environment. Many citizens are not aware of the impact of their individual actions on the environment.
For example
, the media campaign on global warming in America has had a behavioural impact on many
people
 and has changed the way a lot of them put environmental
protection
 at the forefront.
Additionally
, the government in each country can be more knowledgeable the preserving the environment through laws. By breaking the law,
people
 should have paid the penalty in the form of a high pay fine.
For example
, an environmental law that banned
gas
 flaring in Nigeria
,
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 has resulted in
gas
 companies' multi-million dollar investment in
gas
 processing thereby reducing
gas
 pollution. In conclusion, the public awareness of environmental
protection
 and the conscious effort of the government through fundamental laws will help to solve the environmental problems.Like the popular saying charity begins at home.
Similarly
, If each country
tackle
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this
 issue locally, the aggregated result will be unprecedented.
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