The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
The pie charts give information about how many and what kind of
used
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water
in six different regions.
Overall
, It has huge and ovious
differences in features between North Correct your spelling
obvious
America
and Europe
to other worlds such
as Asia
, South America
and Africa.
Firstly
, both North America
and Europe
are not over half the rate of water
used for agriculture each 39 per cent
and 32 per cent
. In contrast
, the water
used for the same purpose in South America
, Africa, Central Asia
, and South & East
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and East
Asia
is over 70 per cent
.
Secondly
, In North America
the percentage of Add a comma
,America
water
used for Industrial use and Domestic use is 61 per cent
. And Europe
, like North America
, is 68 percent
over 60 per Change the spelling
per cent
cent
. But the other four areas, South America
, Africa, Central Asia
and South East Asia
are completely different from North America
and Europe
. The percentage of water
they consume for industry and domestic is not only exceeding half but not even 30 per cent
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