The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

In today's era of technology,a large proportion of the world believes that

unlawful

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behaviour of youngsters are caused

wholely

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entirely

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due

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by

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to negligence of mother towards their offsprings as they are working woman and not a housewife anymore like two decades ago.

Whereas

I totally disagree with

this

statement as

this

situation arises because of factors

such

as lack of carelessness of

both

parents and

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peer pressure

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of youngsters.

Firstly

, not only the mother is responsible for the upbringing of their child but

also

father contributes as much as her in

this

phase of life.

Therefore

,

both

parents must take care of their young one's behaviour and habits.Apart from

it

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this

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,women

also

have

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a fundamental

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right to work in

this

democratic country which clearly depicts that if any unexpected situation arises like children suffering from mental

disorder

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and

he needs

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one person at all times,A man must

also

be prepared to do household chores and his spouse can deal with business work which defines that

both

individuals must be in charge of family service .

Secondly

,the reason

of

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for

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the

adolscent's

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adolescent's

adolescents

dangerous habits can be

arosen

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arisen

due to

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peer

group

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groups

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.Friends play a vital role in

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the teenage

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phase.Harmful peer

group

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groups

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can lead to dangerous circumstances in one's life.

For instance

,a recent study in Sweden depicts that 80% of

the

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apply

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minors died

due to

drug addiction which is mainly done under

peer

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the peer

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circle of children.

This

illustration clearly states that detrimental

affects

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effects

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in young

people

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lives

is

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are

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also

possible because of acquaintances.

To conclude

,

although

a woman gives birth to a baby

but

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a man

also

plays a significant role in taking care of the children,

hence

care must be done

from

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by

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both

parents equally.

Moreover

,by coming

in

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under

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influence

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the influence

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of group pressure,a person can do various dangerous activities in his life.