The chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.

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The pie chart illustrates the percentage of British students who were able to speak other

languages

more than English at one university in England in 2000 and 2010.

Overall

, the proportion of students who were able to speak other

languages

went up in 2000, where Spanish was the most commonly speaking language in both years.

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compared to other

languages

. First of all, In 2000 Spanish speakers were highly (30%) compared to other

languages

there are two

languages

containing the same percentage of (15%) French and another language and German consists of (15%) only.

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, German and two other speakers contain (10%).

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, the

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students

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increased (5%) compared to 2000,

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slightly reduced to (20%) in 2010. German remained at (10%) two other

languages

were followed by (15%) and no other

languages

and another language remained at (10%) in 2010

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decreased to (10%) respectively.

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The chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.

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