The chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.

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The pie chart illustrates the percentage of British students who were able to speak other

languages

more than English at one university in England in 2000 and 2010.

Overall

, the proportion of students who were able to speak other

languages

went up in 2000, where Spanish was the most commonly speaking language in both years.

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compared to other

languages

. First of all, In 2000 Spanish speakers were highly (30%) compared to other

languages

there are two

languages

containing the same percentage of (15%) French and another language and German consists of (15%) only.

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, German and two other speakers contain (10%).

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, the

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students

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increased (5%) compared to 2000,

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slightly reduced to (20%) in 2010. German remained at (10%) two other

languages

were followed by (15%) and no other

languages

and another language remained at (10%) in 2010

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decreased to (10%) respectively.

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The chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.

Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

Topic: Some people think that the spread of multinational companies and globalization produces positive outcomes for everyone. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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