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Some people think that it is beneficial for old people to learn something new while others believe that once a person is past 65 years of age it is too late to learn. What is your opinion?

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As a highly controversial issue, some
people
 believe that old
people
 are required to learn something new and others think it is uncalled-for after 65 years old because they are unable to use new materials. I personally opt for the latter one and will explain it
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further
. As a highly
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sufficient
 and practical way of improving
people
's
self esteem
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, learning new material has always been top tire ones . Regarding
people
's age group, learning new
skills
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 more importance among elderies. Mainly because these age
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group
groups
 are highly
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sensitive
 and
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susceptible
 to
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 diseases
such
 as
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 and constantly need their mind to be activated.
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Moreover
, they are
sensetive
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sensitive
 as they feel usually detached from their children
therefore
, they need extra attention. If old
people
 have a
privilage
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privilege
 to spend more
time
 with their children
while
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 teaching them , they feel better and more confident .
Although
 they may have hardship absorbing new material, they can benefit from their
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family's
families
 company and increase their quality of
time
. On the other side, those who presume
old
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generation
 is not
requied
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required
 to know new
skills
 usually argue that
this
 action is not
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necessary
. Mainly because they are not able to use these
skills
 in a practical way and
this
 is nothing but wasting young
people
's
time
. To
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clarify
,
people
 over 65 are more attuned
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 their routine and tend to be highly absent-minded when it comes to
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 new
skills
. These age groups want their
time
 to be spent among their friends and they are
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more
 likely to
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their
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 golden years. As a
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result
,
push
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 them to spend their
time
 to understand new methods
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 them the most. In a nutshell,
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although
older
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 generation normally has
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time
to learn
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 something new,
this
 can
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substantially
 increase their
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 of well-being.
On the other
hand
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this
 may
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 bothersome if they are
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reluctant
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