The diagrams below show the development of the horse. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided diagram illustrates the evolution of

horse

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horses

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, focusing crucially

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on the

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the

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their

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foot structure

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apply

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them

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apply

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Overall

, there are four noticeable modifications demonstrated

cross

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across

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4 distinct periods of the

horse

, starting with Eohippus

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million

years

ago and ending with

horse

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the horse

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at present. First of all, Eohippus which existed

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million

years

ago , is distinguished by a smaller body compared to the modern

horse

This

kind of

horse

had one small tail and 4 legs,

additionally

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there were 4 phalanges on each paw.

Nevertheless

, after 10

million

years

, Mesohippus conceiving had enhanced alterations

about

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body

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the body

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It is clear that

Mesohippus was larger than Eohippus and its tail enhanced to be longer.

Likewise

this

kind of

horse

was refined to have more tuft of hair. It is obvious that Mesohippus's hoof was lost a

planlanx

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phalanx

. Dating back to 15

million

years

ago, Merychippus appeared.

This

ancestral house was relatively

simlilar

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similar

to the modern

horse

and those were still 3 phalanges.

Nonetheless

, it did not have a marginally smaller size compared to the present

horse

Finally

, after 15

million

years

, the modern

horse

appearing had

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a thicker tail.

In addition

, its tuft of hair emerged noticeably. It is

noteble

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notable

noted

that the present

horse

phalanges fused into

single

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the single

a single

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hoof.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Replace the words horse, million, years with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.

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3Word repetition
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17Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

209 words

6.50

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

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Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Clear and correct grammar

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