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some people think that the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree? agree: - raising price helps people reduce overuse - limiting depletion of natural fuels disagree: - There are better ways like using energy from the sun, water

#people #cost #fuel #price #overuse #depletion #fuels #energy #sun #water
It is widely believed that the best
way
 to protect
environment
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 is to raise the cost of
fuel
. Personally, I can neither completely agree nor disagree with
this
 statement for a variety of reasons. I partly agree that in order to solve issues relating to
global
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environment
 a raise in the
fuel
 fare is a must. One of the main reasons can be that many factories and corporations will no longer be able to afford it and reduce overuse.
As a result
, the tendency
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fuel
 has been reduced. Manufacturers or researchers will conduct research on other energy sources that do not cause
polluted
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environment
. Another reason can be limiting
depletion
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the depletion
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 of natural fuels. The governments have issued a policy to increase prices on
import
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 or production of direct
fuel
.
This
 is to reduce excessive
fuel
 consumption.
On the other hand
, I disagree with the viewpoint that increasing the
prise
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price
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 of
fuel
 is the best
way
 to solve global
environment
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 problems. Using renewable sources of power. Nowadays, the level of science is increasingly advanced. Research into other energies to replace
fuel
such
 as solar and wind energy.
For example
,
according to
 the 2020 government report, the replacement of solar energy in buildings or for electricity generation is helping
decreasing
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 of polluted
environment
. In conclusion,
although
 some people
believed
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 that increasing the cost of
fuel
 is the best
way
, I am convinced that there is
other
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way
also
 the best
way
 to reduce global
environmetal
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environmental
 problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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