The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided map illustrates information
the
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change in area planning
town
development of Norbiton.
Overall
,the
town
will change
form
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from
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factory
sites
to housing
sites
. And, it has
planning
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to
built
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many public
emenities
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amenities
.
Also
, they will add roads and a bridge. When it comes to
now
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apply
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Norbiton
town
, it has 8
factory
sites
.
there
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is
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nearby roads.
However
, the
factory
sites
not
locate
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around
river
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the river
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.
Wnen
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When
it comes to the
town
planning, they will remove
the
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all
factory
sites
. And
then
, they will
built
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build
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housing
sites
and public buildings. The public buildings are
school
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a school
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, medical
center
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and playground.
In addition
, they will construct a shopping site too.
Also
, they will
built
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build
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a bridge which is cross river. As
result
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a result
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, people can
be going
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to Farmland
useing
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using
the bridge. And, they will
built
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build
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7 housing
sites
. Among them
ons
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is
site
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the site
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locate
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located
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in the Farmland. So, they will
rebuilt
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the road which
add
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adds
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round
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a round
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road.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, factory, sites with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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