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With the increasing demand for energy sources of oil and gas, people should look for sources of oil and gas in remote and untouched places. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of damaging such areas

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The question of whether researchers and companies should discover new sources of oil and gas in untouched lands has sparked heated debate. Some claim that progress seems necessary and inevitable,
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 others argue that developing new technologies and renewable power can significantly benefit society as a whole. In my opinion, I do not literally support the topic provided. In the essay, I will elucidate my reasons and offer my personal opinions.
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 with, it is evident that humanity is facing a pressing problem- lack of energy, and obviously finding more in distant areas become an option.
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, the energy industry may start detecting resources around the North Pole and the South regions.
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, extremely detrimental to the environment, the particular conduct ultimately results in devastating impacts on animal habitats and global warming.
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, other approaches should be seriously considered.
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, another method
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 usually emphasized is sustainable power supply, meaning that the government can construct more wind stations or solar panel arrays to secure electricity.
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, there are around 20% capacity supply utilizes wind and sun to generate electricity, making it the second largest sector of the
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 yield. In
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 a way, citizens can not only have security but
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 enjoy more healthy lives, avoiding the harmful substances that burning fossil fuels could bring. In conclusion,
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 the reasons listed above, I firmly believe that the statement causes more disadvantages than advantages.
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, there are still other means to achieve the original purpose without any potential adverse effects.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented
  • unspoiled
  • hydrocarbon exploration
  • biodiversity
  • sustainable energy
  • renewable resources
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental degradation
  • ecosystem conservation
  • indigenous rights
  • climate resilience
  • habitat destruction
  • infrastructure development
  • technological advancements
  • economic stimulus
  • social unrest
  • environmental conservation
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